Monday, April 4, 2016

Nature Poem




nature is beautiful
nature can often be unfair
Image result for creek
sounds like a musical
the whoosh of the wind through my hair

the clean rivers are smooth
the green grass blades are thin
like a fountain of youth
like course hair of buckskinImage result for wild deer
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2 comments:

  1. AnonymousApril 4, 2016 at 10:10 AM

    Dear Andy,

    It is worded well
    But could have used more detail
    Try some new grammar

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  2. AnonymousApril 5, 2016 at 8:08 AM

    Dear Andy,

    Your poem is very boring
    But it is so adoring.
    Make it a little longer
    And pick words that are stronger



    Thank you Andy keep up the good work

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